Teh Wozzinator

my edits are in bold NOTE: This is something I wrote as a writing prompt. It sort of like an "alternate reality." This didn't actually happen in my book, Followers ...

Hmm, okay, sorry... I guess I'm just used to that more (unless I'm writing--in which case I'm still spoiled, 'cause if I lowercase an "I" it'll automatically correct it. Sorry.)

haha, thanks. i liked that part too...

as i said before, i have edited it, trying to get it to flow better. i hope i succeeded...once i finish part one i'll post all of the chapters in ...

i agree with Saint (Razorblade), it's a bit rushed...it's not exactly my style of writing with the "colonial" sort of thing, but it wasn't bad. the first paragraph needs more ...

i don't see anything to edit grammar-wise...i liked your first paragraph, how you described it--acting as you are the author, not someone in the story writing it, but not to ...

ok, that was kind of creepy and totally different...nothing new to say here, either. i think that it's interesting of all your totally different ratings for everything, but i do ...

this is crazy, how the time period and stories keep changing...i'm kind of surprised that you won't ever repeat any characters (except for the mutts, i assume...), but from these ...

wow, this seems totally different from the last two, but i really liked it! just keeps adding more and more mystery, yet clearing just a few things up. it's like ...

well, it seems as though Saint and Penguin have taken care of edits for me, but i must say...i like the style that you're writing with, and your idea of ...

one thing i must ask, though, is...why is it called Mutts? perhaps that has to do with the real mystery subject?????

i thought that for such a short piece, you did really well. no grammar to edit...your character development (i agree) is great, and already i'm starting to know the characters. ...

edits in bold I couldn't decide if this belonged in lyrical or narrative poetry, so I put it here. Happy Holidays everyone! Silence Hangs in the Air Still as a ...

well...sorry, it isn't going to be continued, i messed up the last sentence, it's supposed to be "He was slammed into the intersection of Peterston and 4th, the upside down ...

my edits are in bold Hey this is my first thing to ever post so keep that in mind when you read this! I need the criticism, so please don't ...